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Who can tell me where Maria is?

At the cold end of Ikogosi spring

I looked at the flow of this cold spring

I thought Maria sitting by the side of this cold spring

But this cold end of my Ikogosi

Became an ocean current

It was an endless search in

My pacific ocean

I looked at the warm end of my Ikogosi

It was better than a hot plate

Where is my Maria?

I could only find a clone Maria

At the Ikogosi convergence

There lies cloned Maria

Mixed in the hot and cold spring

Conjugation gave me a minute sense

It was not Maria’s unique bonding

All I recall was Maria makes me whole

All grave become six more feet

The undertakers carried a living corpse

It was a condolence of Ignorance

Despite who I am now

I know Maria left with a part of me

If she came back, bonding was same

Then who is this drone after bonding

 

Written by:

MORDI IFEANYI APEX

Writer/Educator/Tutor

University of Benin

Department of English

 

STRUCTURAL REVIEW 

Oscillation is a poem that portrays the social transaction between two ‘die hard’ lovers.

Unlike Shakespeare’s Romeo and Juliet where the story lies on the distinction in status between Romeo background and that of Juliet. The lovers in this poem (oscillation) experienced not only status difference,but class differences. The poet justifies the experience of the lovers in Oscillation with an identity to that of the experience of Jack and Rose in the movie entitled ‘Titanic’ and Shakespeare’s Romeo and Juliet in respect of statues and class differences.

The poem does not only wear a tragic blanket but also has elements of chaos becoming the order of the day for both lovers.

Line 1-5of the poem tell us about the mood of one of the lovers.

Line 1-5

Who can tell me where Maria is?

At the cold end of Ikogosi spring

I looked at the flow of this cold spring

I thought Maria sitting by the side of this cold spring

The preceding expression by the lover in this poem tells how experience several mood swings in his subconscious. The subconscious of the lover in this poem is likened to the cold end of IKOGOSI.

The IKOGOSI warm spring is a tourist attraction located at IKOGOSI, a town in Ekiti state, Southern western Nigeria. Flowing abreast the warm spring is another cold spring at a confluence, each maintaining its thermal properties. The attributions of IKOGOSI warm and cold spring’s thermal properties to the loves subconscious is figurative and tends to be factual of the natural , sometimes mixed feelings of humans.

Line 10I looked at the warm end of my Ikogosi

Here line 10 of the poem shows the expression of the lover as this thought roam the warm end of IKOGOSI spring. Even in the lover’s subconscious and his physical search for his Maria, he ends up confused .

This poem has a story line. It began with two passionate lovers who began experiencing challenges because of parental religious background and class distinction. The main story has it that the parents of the boy(Jubril) who are very rich and are Muslims introduced a plan to get rid of their son’s Maria who was a Christian and from a very poor background. The parent  of Maria where not also in support of their daughters relationship with Jubril. The parents of Jubril decided to clone another Maria for their son,but after love making with cloned Maria ,Jubril’s confusion becomes more of a tangle. His suspicious and doubt becomes more stronger. He suspects he is not with the same Maria he loves.

The poet intention analyse the deep thought of Jubril love for Old Maria and doubt for cloned Maria. The poet MORDI IFEANYI APEX also seek to portray the religious misfit and class conflicts in an under-developed society, a developing society and sometimes a developed society.

The poet main intention of this poem is to let us understand the ‘ products’ of religious and class wars.

Jubril new transformation in confusion, cloned Maria and old Maria are all results of this religious,and class wars. The lover (Jubril) in the poem expresses thus:

Lines 18-21

Conjugation gave me a minute sense

It was not Maria unique bonding

All I recall was Maria make me whole

All grave became six more feet

Line 25-28

Despite who I am now

I know Maria left with a part of me

If she came back, bonding was same

Then who is this drone after bonding

The above expression from Jubril is his new state when his doubts for the cloned Maria become stronger.

Despite the accident he had,he could still distinguish that the woman with him is not really his true Maria. Even love making with cloned Maria confirms his doubts.

To get the full novel contact the author of the novel  “oscillation

Mordi ifeanyi Apex

+2347033289203

 

Here is a question for my fellow bloggers and readers:

What are you contribution,opinion  and views about the poem in relation to the society?

Please let me know all your reactions, views and insights in the comment box below!

 

Written by:

Kogwuonye Patrick Onyeka

Writer/Blogger/Educator/Tutor

University of Benin

 

Credited to :

Those who experience religious crisis,  social, class and status misfit in the society

 

 

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112 thoughts on “OSCILLATION

    1. Hahahahhaha… Maria can’t be you. Why do you think like that.

      Don’t worry the structural review will be out soon on the poem. OK.

      Maria is just a normal girl who fell in love.
      That is where I can stop for now.

      The structural review will be coming on the poem.

      Thanks for your comment. Again I appreciate you time in reading to the end.

      #PATRICKSTORIES
      Peace ✌and Love ❤

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    2. Thank you! I appreciate your thoughtful response.

      Such an awesome way of replying someone. Thanks. Again
      As always your posts are incredible and I enjoying reading every word down till the last line. I must say that you are probably one of the excellent bloggers on WordPress that write inspired
      Writing/post

      Also, I just posted: A VIEW OF WOMAN IN THE SOCIETY-
      FATE OF A MANGO FRUIT
      Would love to know your views. Love to see your contributions on it. I’m always excited for your comment. 🙂

      You are welcome

      #PATRICKSTORIES
      Peace ✌and Love ❤

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    1. Thank you so much for reading my post.

      I really appreciate the time you used in reading it. Am very pleased to say you are in suspense now. You really love to know who is this Maria.

      Maria is just a normal girl who fell in love.
      That is where I can stop for now.

      The structural review will be coming on the poem.

      Thanks for your comment.

      #PATRICKSTORIES
      Peace ✌and Love ❤

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  1. There is a very subtle distinction, between involving the parents of each, in a marriage run-up and allowing them total choice in the matter. I believe the distinction lies in whether the parents are willing to give the man and woman the initial choice in forming the relationship.

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    1. I just skimmed through your comment now. Thanks for that i must appreciate you for such contribution on the post. And I must say, it really cool.

      Every one have a choice to marry from any,forgetting the religious aspect. But now we found out the society have made it so hard for this young ones to comply.

      This is where I like in your comment as I quote:
      “”””I believe the distinction lies in whether the parents are willing to give the man and woman the initial choice in forming the relationship. “””

      Please keep the words coming Mr bruin.

      Look forward to seeing more inspired post from you.

      Thank you so much for adding a little inspired word to me this morning.

      #PATRICKSTORIES
      Peace ✌and Love ❤

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    1. Thank you! I appreciate your thoughtful response.

      Such an awesome way of replying someone. Thanks. Again
      As always you comment on all my post.

      Would love to know your views. Love to see your contributions on it. I’m always excited for your comment. 🙂

      You are welcome

      #PATRICKSTORIES
      Peace ✌and Love ❤

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  2. The poem is small but with a rich and deep meaning.When I read it I found lot of terms from Chemistry and Physics involved, like oscillation, cold,hot,current,bond,clone,converge.I don’t know whether the author has used it purposefully,even then I loved those terms in the poem.And identity stands as a barrier to their love.In ‘Romeo Juliet’ Juliet says to Romeo,
    “Deny thy father and refuse thy name,
    Or if thou wilt not,be sworn my love,
    And I’ll no longer be a Capulet”
    Their families acts as an obstacle in their love.

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    1. Am the type who reads very inspired comment on my post. You comment  and explanation are quite OK about the post.

      Your beautiful words just made my day OK now.
      Thank you so much for adding such magical drop of words in my jar of motivation and inspiration. I feel blessed by what you said at the beginning of your comment as i quote:

      “”””‘ The poem is small but with a rich and deep meaning. When I read it I found lot of terms from Chemistry and Physics involved, like oscillation, cold,hot,current,bond,clone, converge. “””””

      Those where the words used by the poet to justify the physic and chemistry between the two loved ones.

      As I read deeper in to your comment I saw something’s that touched me very much which is this part in your comment:
      “”” And identity stands as a barrier to their love. “””

      This is where I know you good in recalling and giving the exact quotations from the novel:
      Juliet says to Romeo,

      “”Deny thy father and refuse thy name,
      Or if thou wilt not,be sworn my love,
      And I’ll no longer be a Capulet”

      Finally, why will the love last if

      “””Their families acts as an obstacle in their love. “”””

      I found delight love in what you just said  about my post OSCILLATION in the comment session.
      Again such a beautiful way to express it on my blog/post
      Keep the vibes on.

      #PATRICKSTORIES
      Peace ✌and Love ❤

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  3. Closed minded ideologies have an effect on many things, causing many to fear to follow their dreams… usually ending in needless suffering. pain and anger… “I would rather have a mind opened by wonder than one closed by belief” Gerry Spence

    In order to find happiness, sometimes one has to ignore society…it can be challenging at times but worth it in the end… that is why I have taken the path least traveled.. 🙂

    “Be happy. Be yourself. If others don’t like it, then let them be. Happiness is a choice, life isn’t about pleasing everybody”.

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    1. Thank you. I am happy to see your detailed comment on this post. It gives me a thoughtful thinking and am  happy for that. That is always my intention to see a comment that gives me a thoughtful thinking and deep meaning about life.

      As always your comment are incredible and I enjoying reading every word down till the last line. I must say that you are probably one of the excellent bloggers on WordPress.

      What you said in your comment is true.
      I enjoyed this part where you said:
      “”””Closed minded ideologies have an effect on many things, causing many to fear to follow their dreams”””””

      I guess belief are what causes most of the religious wars,class war, and status war we have in our society.

      Am touche by the inspirational quote by GERRY SPENCE :
      “””’would rather have a mind opened by wonder than one closed by belief””””

      The two lover were looking for happiness so they have to ignore such belief. It not easy but but worth it in the end.

      Finally, you just made you last opinion and contribution as I quote from your comment:

      “Be happy. Be yourself. If others don’t like it, then let them be. Happiness is a choice, life isn’t about pleasing everybody”. “”””‘

      This last part of the comment touched me because the lover have to neglect their belief despite their parents not accepting it.

      Am surprise sometimes by that drop of comment in this enough to get a person to thinking with your beautiful post to back it up.

      So keep the vibes flowing.

      Thanks for the wonderful comment

      Cheers,

      PATRICK

      #PATRICKSTORIES
      Peace ✌and Love ❤

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  4. The poem at first do seemed to have a deeper meaning. I did got the feel of pain and segregation of two lovers and also knew something terrible had happened. But after reading the explanation part, I got to know what was really happening. It is amazing to put an explanation to the poem below it. I loved the deepness of the poem.

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    1. Thanks for the kind words. I appreciate you effort and time used in commenting on this post.
      Am able to get what you said in this part but I have to do the the review so my readers can get deep meaning in to the poem. So I totally agree to this part where you said “”””
      The poem at first do seemed to have a deeper meaning. I did got the feel of pain and segregation of two lovers and also knew something terrible had happened.””””

      I know how challenging it is to write every day, but we do it with good intent and passion and also try to read meaning in to what we write. That makes it joyous.

      I am always touched when my sweet comment like this reach my post. Sincere thanks. What a good positive comment that can motivate one this morning.

      Happy weekend
      Enjoy

      Warm regards, Patrick

      #PATRICKSTORIES
      Peace ✌and Love ❤

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    1. Thank you! I appreciate your thoughtful response.
      Your beautiful comment and agreement to this post on my blog just made my evening.
      I found delight love in what you just said on my  post.

      Here is a question for my fellow bloggers and readers:

      Have you felt and connected this poem to any religious crisis in our society.

      Please let me know all your reactions, views and insights in the comment box below!

      I will love to see you thoughtful reply and answer on the question put before you.

      #PATRICKSTORIES
      Peace ✌and Love ❤

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  5. This was a very intense and thought-provoking poem. I must say, the detailed description does answer a lot of questions that arise in the reader but there still remain a few questions, like, will the two true lovers ever meet? Will the confusion be resolved? Who is the cloned Maria and what is her eventual fate? Why does society create such scenarios where no one is benefitted (neither the lovers, the new Maria, the parents nor the society itself)?
    This poem has its own beauty as it depicts the true scenario of today’s society!

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    1. Thank you! I appreciate your thoughtful response and comment on the post.

      Yes, I tend to be very logical with the poem.
      So I relate the poem with things happening in our society and the religious crisis.

      Am quite happy about how you read the poem to the end. Yeah actually as you said in the beginning
      “””This was a very intense and thought-provoking poem. “”

      I tried to make it more intense ,deep and thoughtful.

      I was able make the poem to be a suspense to my readers and viewers.

      So I have to make a structural review on it to put off they mind of suspense.

      Most of my readers and viewers thoughts are on Jubril, Cloned Maria, Maria and her death will appear to be :

      1. Will he(Jubril) find another Maria, an individual who meets his requirement and fills the role and the void within him.

      2. Is the woman in the casket actually Maria, or is it a clone?

      3. Was he lost in an empty space, does this complex situation give him peace.

      3. Will Maria return to him, or will he find another, or will cloned Maria make him complete.

      4. What if he discovers the cloned Maria. What we be his state?

      From your own views I know you have a lot of questions to ask me. As I progress and read in your comment I was able to caption some thoughtful questions some of the readers and viewers we be asking like:

      1. Will the two true lovers ever meet?

      2. Will the confusion be resolved?

      3. Who is the cloned Maria and what is her eventual fate?

      4. Why does society create such scenarios where no one is benefitted (neither the lovers, the new Maria, the parents nor the society itself)?

      Yeah. The poem has such a deep,thoughtful and intense meaning like you said in your comment:
      “””This poem has its own beauty as it depicts the true scenario of today’s society! “”””

      Again,I like to write a post and a well organized write up which lets me process my thoughts in an organized useful way to my fellow readers/bloggers!:)

      Thanks for the comment and your own review on it.

      You welcome dear friend to PATRICKSTORIES

      #PATRICKSTORIES
      Peace ✌and Love ❤

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    1. **Hi
      Thank you. I am happy to see your wonderful comment on the post. It gives me a thoughtful thinking and am  happy for that. That is always my intention to see a comment that gives me motivation as i penned and reply you.

      Am happy you saw the review about the poem.

      Just love to ask you a simple question:

      What are you contribution,opinion  and views about the poem in relation to the society?

      Please let me know all your reactions, views and insights in the comment box below!

      Lastly, thanks again for that beautiful comment.

      You welcome dear friend.

      #PATRICKSTORIES
      Peace ✌and Love ❤

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    1. Thank you! I appreciate your thoughtful response.

      Here is a question for my fellow bloggers and readers:

      Have you felt and connected this poem to any religious crisis in our society.

      Please let me know all your reactions, views and insights in the comment box below!

      I will love to see you thoughtful reply and answer on the question put before you.

      #PATRICKSTORIES
      Peace ✌and Love ❤

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  6. A very nice piece, love the depth it has when reading into it… from what I understand it is such a lovely piece that illustrates both the struggles and beauty of being in love (although mostly the struggles, of course). Can’t wait to read your explanation! 🙂

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    1. Your beautiful comment just made my day. Thank you so much for adding such a comment. I feel blessed by your writing and comment  right now.
      I found delight love in what you just said in my  post (OSCILLATION).

      Love the part about the struggles between the two loves as you said in your comment:

      “””‘ from what I understand it is such a lovely piece that illustrates both the struggles and beauty of being in love (although mostly the struggles, of course). “””””

      The detail explanation and review about the poem is also there. Just check below it.

      Again, thanks for such a beautiful comment on this post.
      Keep the love on.

      #PATRICKSTORIES
      Peace ✌and Love ❤

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    1. Thank you! I appreciate your thoughtful response.
      Your beautiful comment and agreement to this post on my blog just made my evening.
      I found delight love in what you just said on my  post.

      Here is a question for my fellow bloggers and readers:

      Have you felt and connected this poem to any religious crisis in our society.

      Please let me know all your reactions, views and insights in the comment box below!

      I will love to see you thoughtful reply and answer on the question put before you.

      #PATRICKSTORIES
      Peace ✌and Love ❤

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    1. Thank you! I appreciate your thoughtful response.

      Here is a question for my fellow bloggers and readers:

      Have you felt and connected this poem to any religious crisis in our society.

      Please let me know all your reactions, views and insights in the comment box below!

      I will love to see you thoughtful reply and answer on the question put before you.

      #PATRICKSTORIES
      Peace ✌and Love ❤

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    1. Thank you! I appreciate your thoughtful response.

      Here is a question for my fellow bloggers and readers:

      Have you felt and connected this poem to any religious crisis in our society.

      Please let me know all your reactions, views and insights in the comment box below!

      I will love to see you thoughtful reply and answer on the question put before you.

      #PATRICKSTORIES
      Peace ✌and Love ❤

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    2. Yeah, absolutely. This poem is a masterpiece. And there are many religious crisis happens in our society. But, one must do what he is determined to do and the thing that is right for him.
      I felt that this poem should reach to more and more people and apologies for the late reply.
      Have a wonderful day! 😊

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    3. I just went through your reply about the question i asked you about the poem OSCILLATION and the answer was wow.

      And I must say, it really cool, it that gives people a chance to think about the religious crisis we face in our society.

      I appreciate your time used in connecting the poem to the society like you said in your reply.

      Am happy for such reply and I saw one that inspired me right now:
      “””” one must do what he is determined to do and the thing that is right for him. “”””

      Please keep the words coming Mrs/Miss Rudraa Makwana. Look forward to seeing more inspired comment and views  from you.

      Thank you so much for adding a little inspired word to me this morning.

      #PATRICKSTORIES
      Peace ✌and Love ❤

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    1. Thank you! I appreciate your thoughtful response.
      Your beautiful comment and agreement to this post on my blog just made my evening.
      I found delight love in what you just said on my  post.

      I will like to ask you a simple question:

      Have you felt and connected this poem to any religious crisis in our society.

      Please let me know all your reactions, views and insights in the comment box below!

      I will love to see you thoughtful reply and answer on the question put before you.

      #PATRICKSTORIES
      Peace ✌and Love ❤

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  7. Dearest Patrick, I thought a lot if I should comment on your poem, because, from the first reading, before seeing your wonderful explanations, I felt like this is NOT a poem about love…It made me think and meditate about the Middle East crisis, about Palestine, about all the conflicts generated by false ideologies and leaders.
    It made me pray…May we open the eyes of our souls, to see that true faith should unite us and true love should make us better. May fanaticism never stand a chance in front of the pure hearts of the young generation…
    I spoke too much, again 🙂 Forgive me if I was way out base, it’s just my input on this amazing piece of writing.

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    1. I just skimmed through your comment and the comment was wow. And I must say, it really cool, it that gives people a chance to think.

      Thanks for answering the question.
      I appreciate your views on this post.

      Please keep the words coming Mrs/Miss Claudia.

      The poem has many view depending on who making such review. I base my view base on religious crisis happening between lovers who have different religions and they parents didn’t accept it at all for the lovers.

      Am happy you related it to the happening in middle east as you quoted in your comment and about the false ideologies and leaders.
      Here is the quote:

      “”””” It made me think and meditate about the Middle East crisis, about Palestine, about all the conflicts generated by false ideologies and leaders. “””””

      The only thing we should have and keep us moving is the believe in true faith and true love.

      You are free to say your views about it. You welcome always. You are not out base. LOL.

      Thanks for using that word: it’s just my input on this amazing piece of writing.

      Look forward to seeing more inspired comment from you.

      Thank you so much for adding a little inspired word to me this morning.

      #PATRICKSTORIES
      Peace ✌and Love ❤

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    1. Thank you! I appreciate your thoughtful response.

      Here is a question for my fellow bloggers and readers:

      Have you felt and connected this poem to any religious crisis in our society.

      Please let me know all your reactions, views and insights in the comment box below!

      I will love to see you thoughtful reply and answer on the question put before you.

      #PATRICKSTORIES
      Peace ✌and Love ❤

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    1. Thank you! I appreciate your thoughtful response.

      Here is a question for my fellow bloggers and readers:

      Have you felt and connected this poem to any religious crisis in our society.

      Please let me know all your reactions, views and insights in the comment box below!

      I will love to see you thoughtful reply and answer on the question put before you.

      #PATRICKSTORIES
      Peace ✌and Love ❤

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    1. Thanks for the comment. I appreciate your time used in connecting the poem to the society.

      Am the type who reads very inspired comment on my post. You comment  and explanation are quite OK about the post.

      I will love to ask you a simple question:

      Have you felt and connected this poem to any religious crisis in our society.

      Please let me know all your reactions, views and insights in the comment box below!

      I will love to see you thoughtful reply and answer on the question put before you.

      Again thanks for the beautiful comment on my blog/post.

      Keep the vibes on.

      #PATRICKSTORIES
      Peace ✌and Love ❤

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    2. I have seen people going through suffrage for the reason being they are in love but can not do nothing because he or she is from another religion.
      And i am also the one who suffered from it😛

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    3. Thank you! I appreciate your thoughtful response.

      Am happy you answered and replayed well to the question put across you.

      Am trying to get that statement where you said: And i am also the one who suffered from it😛

      You free to share idea and opinion here. OK. MR SHIVANG.

      #PATRICKSTORIES
      Peace ✌and Love ❤

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  8. The storyteller or poetry creator appears in this setting to be lonely his entire being filled with guilt and grievances. His thoughts are on Maria and her death, this thoughts appear to be, “will he find another Maria, an individual who meets his requirement and fills the role and the void within him. Is the woman in the casket actually Maria, or is it a clone? Was he lost in an empty space, does this complex situation give him peace. Will Maria return to him, or will he find another, or will only Maria make him complete. This is the premise that I received from your story. I love it, the story it told was deep and painful, and no love can be replaced. You can only hope there is another that will somehow fill the void. Good Luck, E.

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    1. Thank you! I appreciate your thoughtful response and comment on the post.

      Yes, I tend to be very logical with the poem.
      So I relate the poem with things happening in our society and the religious crisis.

      Am quite happy about how you read the poem to the end.

      I was able to pick out some point you noted in the structural review as i quote:

      ((((( His thoughts are on Maria and her death. This thoughts appear to be :

      1. Will he find another Maria, an individual who meets his requirement and fills the role and the void within him.

      2. Is the woman in the casket actually Maria, or is it a clone?

      3. Was he lost in an empty space, does this complex situation give him peace.

      3. Will Maria return to him, or will he find another, or will only Maria make him complete. )))))

      From you review above. This are the deep thought of Jubril at the moment.

      Thanks for that kind word:

      “””” This is the premise that I received from your story. I love it, the story it told was deep and painful, and no love can be replaced. “”””

      I spend my enough energy trying to make things better using my own review about the poem which I think is personally.

      I like to write a post and a well organized write up which lets me process my thoughts in an organized useful way to my fellow readers/bloggers!:)

      Thanks for the comment.

      You welcome dear friend to PATRICKSTORIES

      #PATRICKSTORIES
      Peace ✌and Love ❤

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    1. Thanks for the comment. I appreciate your time used in connecting the poem to the society.

      Am the type who reads very inspired comment on my post. You comment  and explanation are quite OK about the post.

      I will love to ask you a simple question:

      Have you felt and connected this poem to any religious crisis in our society.

      Please let me know all your reactions, views and insights in the comment box below!

      I will love to see you thoughtful reply and answer on the question put before you.

      Again thanks for the beautiful comment on my blog/post.

      Keep the vibes on.

      #PATRICKSTORIES
      Peace ✌and Love ❤

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  9. Beautiful and awesome post!. Too bad, culture, religion, and racism have made the world almost inhabitable. I wish we can put aside our indifferences and beliefs so we can thrive in unity and progress. You took your time to write the point, I can’t help but notice the beauty of African-tourist attractions, well done!!. I will also like to do a post about Nigerian tourist destinations what do you think?

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    1. Thanks for the comment. I appreciate your time used in connecting the poem to the society.

      Am happy you did a personal review on it based on what you wrote:

      “”” Too bad, culture, religion, and racism have made the world almost inhabitable. “””

      Who are you? What is your name?

      Am trying to see who your are?

      I so much wish to see your kind of person in this world. I love this part where you said:

      “”” I wish we can put aside our indifferences and beliefs so we can thrive in unity and progress. “”””

      Nigeria have enough tourist attraction.I was
      able to picture this part of the warm spring which hard a significant in what my poem we feel like.

      Again thanks for the beautiful comment on my blog/post.

      Keep the vibes on.

      For any information email me:@patrickreallstories@gmail.com

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    2. Aww, so sweet. Do you remember when you encouraged me on my new first blog post, well. I have just turned 1 month old blogger since last week and all thanks to people like you too. I am happy to be part of your blog readers. Cheers

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    3. Fantastic and  amazing comment.
      You are a phenomenal person with such incredible comment.

      Am happy you are doing fine in your blog.
      Am so glad that you had to comment on it.

      Thanks to that word :
      “””””
      I have just turned 1 month old blogger since last week and all thanks to people like you too. I am happy to be part of your blog readers. Cheers “”””””

      I hope you have a wonderful and relaxing week.

      #PATRICKSTORIES
      Peace ✌and Love ❤

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  10. Patrick, the piece is beautiful and your review of it is detailed, precise, and very interesting. It is obvious you have a keen eye for true art and the perspective to give true raw emotion in the form of your explanations. I look forward to reading more from you family, asè 🙏🏽

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    1. Thanks for the comment. I appreciate your time used in connecting the poem to the society.

      Am the type who reads very inspired comment on my post. You comment  and explanation are quite OK about the post.

      I will love to ask you a simple question:

      Have you felt and connected this poem to any religious crisis in our society.

      Please let me know all your reactions, views and insights in the comment box below!

      I will love to see you thoughtful reply and answer on the question put before you.

      Again thanks for the beautiful comment on my blog/post.

      Keep the vibes on.

      #PATRICKSTORIES
      Peace ✌and Love ❤

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    1. Fantastic and  amazing comment.
      You are a phenomenal person with such incredible comment.

      Am happy you are doing fine in your blog.

      Am so glad that you had to comment on it.

      I will love to ask you a simple question:

      Have you felt and connected this poem to any religious crisis in our society.

      Please let me know all your reactions, views and insights in the comment box below!

      I will love to see you thoughtful reply and answer on the question put before you.

      Again thanks for the beautiful comment on my blog/post.

      I will love to see you thoughtful reply and answer on the question put before you.

      I hope you have a wonderful and relaxing day

      #PATRICKSTORIES
      Peace ✌and Love ❤

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    2. Yes, in our society there’s so much religious intolerance and sadly people are firm in their thinking of what they value before everything, and it’s religion i mean religion is a very serious matter, that’s an individual’s personal value but humanity comes first, and if someone practices their religion then they suppose to be aware of their religion teachings and as far as i know no religion spread the message of discrimination and violence against each other, when it comes to love, i wish it could happen only between two people from same faith so that fanatic people in our society would be more tolerant because i don’t want to witness tragic end of someone’s love story, Thanks for asking my thoughts 🙏

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    3. Thanks for replying and answering the question put across you.
      Your beautiful comment and agreement to this post on my blog just made my evening.
      I found delight love in what you just said on my  post.

      This is where people get it wrong, they take religious belief first before humanity.
      Am happy you were able to connect the poem to religious and society crisis, as you said in the beginning part of your comment.

      Here is the quote:
      “””””” religion is a very serious matter, that’s an individual’s personal value but humanity comes first “”””””

      As I viewed further on your comment I was able to see what touches my heart:

      “”””as far as i know no religion spread the message of discrimination and violence against each other “”””

      Every religion preach peace and love. They don’t preach violence and hatred against each other.

      I agree and support that part completely where you said :

      “””””when it comes to love, i wish it could happen only between two people from same faith so that fanatic people in our society would be more tolerant “””””

      Agreement base on the same faith and religious is quite OK. Since fanatic people in our society would be more tolerant and in agreement with the same faith and religious.

      This part made me smile 😁😁😁😁😁 when you said:

      “””””  i don’t want to witness tragic end of someone’s love story “””””

      I just thought quickly about Romeo and Juliet occurrence as I stated in the poem analysis.

      Again such a beautiful comment on this post.

      Keep the love and peace on.
      Keep the vibes on.

      You are welcome dear friend to :

      #PATRICKSTORIES
      Peace ✌and Love ❤

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    4. How do we contact.

      Love to extend our friendship.

      For any information email me:@patrickreallstories@gmail.com

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      Peace ✌and Love ❤

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  11. Loveddd it. It’s quite interesting Patrick with very interesting twists. Didn’t expect it ends on a sad note buhhh, loved it any way. Almost did not get the poems voice had to read it about twice to understand it andd I really appreciate the originality of the poem. Keep doing what you do.

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    1. Fantastic and  amazing comment.
      You are a phenomenal person with such incredible comment.
      Am happy you are doing fine in your blog.
      Am so glad that you had to comment on it.
      appreciate your time used.
      I will love to ask you a simple question:
      Have you felt and connected this poem to any religious crisis in our society.
      Please let me know all your reactions, views and insights in the comment box below!
      I will love to see you thoughtful reply and answer on the question put before you.
      Again thanks for the beautiful comment on my blog/post.
      I will love to see you thoughtful reply and answer on the question put before you.
      I hope you have a wonderful and relaxing day
      #PATRICKSTORIES
      Peace ✌and Love ❤

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    2. Ohh yes Patrick I do think it does connect to the Moslems/Christianity misunderstanding. I won’t term it war. The name of the lady maria in the poem depicts Christianity (Catholicism) and the set up of the poem which is at Ikogosi, I’ll would say brings to my mind Moslems and the feud which goes on in the religious world. In the poem, Maria and her lover are also separated by contrasting religious backgrounds. (One more eye opener with regards the poem)

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    3. I just skimmed through your comment and the comment was wow. And I must say, it really cool, it that gives people a chance to think about the feud between the Moslems and Christians.

      Thanks for replying and answering the question being put across you. I appreciate your views on this post.

      Please keep the words coming Mrs/Miss Nkengsido.

      Look forward to seeing more inspired comment from you.

      Thank you so much for adding a little inspired word to me this evening

      HAPPY MONDAY

      #PATRICKSTORIES
      Peace ✌and Love ❤

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    1. Fantastic and  amazing comment.
      You are a phenomenal person with such incredible comment.
      Am happy you are doing fine in your blog.
      Am so glad that you had to comment on it.
      appreciate your time used in connecting the poem to the society.
      I will love to ask you a simple question:
      Have you felt and connected this poem to any religious crisis in our society.
      Please let me know all your reactions, views and insights in the comment box below!
      I will love to see you thoughtful reply and answer on the question put before you.
      Again thanks for the beautiful comment on my blog/post.

      You are welcome dear friend

      #PATRICKSTORIES
      Peace ✌and Love ❤

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  12. Is so sad this happens so often there were worlds apart but they loved each other the springs are the river’s of life
    Separating them but his love was real he knew
    Another would never take her place is just as dramatic as Romeo and Juliet
    Loved It beautiful reading. It had love it was warm and it had sadness
    The makings of a real
    Romantic tragedy

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    1. I just skimmed through your post and the word you used are OK. Am happy you were able to relate the lovers with the springs.
      I appreciate your views on this post.

      I will love to ask you a simple question:

      Have you felt and connected this poem to any religious crisis in our society.

      Please let me know all your reactions, views and insights in the comment box below!

      I will love to see you thoughtful reply and answer on the question put before you.

      Again thanks for the beautiful comment on my blog/post.

      Please keep the words coming Mrs Fernanda. Look forward to seeing more inspired comment from you.

      Thank you so much for adding a little inspired word to me this evening.

      #PATRICKSTORIES
      Peace ✌and Love ❤

      Like

    1. Thanks for the comment.

      Am the type who reads very inspired comment on my post.

      I will love to ask you a simple question:

      Have you felt and connected this poem to any religious crisis in our society.

      Please let me know all your reactions, views and insights in the comment box below!

      I will love to see you thoughtful reply and answer on the question put before you.

      Again thanks for the beautiful comment on my blog/post.

      Keep the vibes on.

      #PATRICKSTORIES
      Peace ✌and Love ❤

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  13. Very interesting poem! Loved it! I have a few theories for your metaphor, but my most prevailing theory is that part of Maria has died mentally, and what is left of her is emotionally distant, based on the metaphor of the river and the oceans. Am I close? That was a very complicated poem and I’ll admit that I was fairly confused by your explanation. Thoughts?

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    1. Thank you for such comment on this post.
      Am happy to see your contribution and views on the poem.
      I am happy to see your detailed comment on this post. It gives me a thoughtful thinking and am  happy for that. That is always my intention to see a comment that gives me a thoughtful thinking.

      What you said in your comment is true.
      I enjoyed this part where you said:

      “””” I have a few theories for your metaphor, but my most prevailing theory is that part of Maria has died mentally, and what is left of her is emotionally distant, based on the metaphor of the river and the oceans. “”””

      Her death was the most interesting part of the poem. Her death made Jubril have troubled mind, doubting when he was with the cloned Maria.

      I enjoying reading every word down till the last line. The last word just made me smile “””Thoughts “””

      Well, If I wish to be happy is inevitable to keep the vibes flowing.

      Cheers,

      PATRICK

      #PATRICKSTORIES
      Peace ✌and Love ❤

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    1. Fantastic and  amazing comment.Am happy you are doing fine in your blog.

      I will love to ask you a simple question:
      Have you felt and connected this poem to any religious crisis in our society.

      Please let me know all your reactions, views and insights in the comment box below!

      I will love to see you thoughtful reply and answer on the question put before you.
      You are welcome dear friend

      #PATRICKSTORIES
      Peace ✌and Love ❤

      Liked by 1 person

    1. Thank you! I appreciate your thoughtful response.

      Here is a question for my fellow bloggers and readers:

      Have you felt and connected this poem to any religious crisis in our society.

      Please let me know all your reactions, views and insights in the comment box below!

      I will love to see you thoughtful reply and answer on the question put before you.

      #PATRICKSTORIES
      Peace ✌and Love ❤

      Liked by 1 person

    2. Thanks for responding back.
      I appreciate that very much.

      It shows your concern for my blog.

      Again THANK YOU VERY MUCH

      I still remain  the simple blogger…..

      #PATRICKSTORIES
      Peace ✌and Love ❤

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    1. Thanks for the comment. I really appreciate the time taken to comment.

      I will like to ask a simple question:

      How can you connect the poem to the religions crisis in our society.

      Please let me know all your reactions, views and insights in the comment box below!

      I will love to see you thoughtful reply and answer on the question put before you.

      Again thanks for the beautiful comment on my blog/post.

      Happy Monday

      #PATRICKSTORIES
      Peace ✌and Love ❤

      Like

    2. Two things I personally don’t like to talk or debate about is religion and political views because they’re sensitive topics and I’d rather spread more love and insight than debate.

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    3. Thanks for replying me. This reply means alot to me.
      Such an awesome way of replying someone.
      Thanks. Again.

      I didn’t anything about debate. Just saying your view and contribution toward the connection of the poem and the society.

      Just needed your contribution on it

      You welcome dear friend.

      Keep the vibes on.😀😀😀😀😀😀😀😀

      Enjoy this week

      #PATRICKSTORIES
      Peace ✌and Love ❤

      Liked by 1 person

    1. Fantastic and  amazing comment.
      You are a phenomenal person with such incredible comment.

      Am happy you are doing fine in your blog.

      Am so glad that you had to comment on it.
      appreciate your time used in connecting the poem to the society.

      I will love to ask you a simple question:

      Have you felt and connected this poem to any religious crisis in our society.

      Please let me know all your reactions, views and insights in the comment box below!

      I will love to see you thoughtful reply and answer on the question put before you.

      Again thanks for the beautiful comment on my blog/post.

      I will love to see you thoughtful reply and answer on the question put before you.

      Like

    1. Am so glad that you had to comment on it.
      appreciate your time used in connecting the poem to the society.

      I will love to ask you a simple question:

      Have you felt and connected this poem to any religious crisis in our society.

      Please let me know all your reactions, views and insights in the comment box below!

      I will love to see you thoughtful reply and answer on the question put before you.

      Again thanks for the beautiful comment on my blog/post.

      I will love to see you thoughtful reply and answer on the question put before you.

      Keep the vibes on.

      #PATRICKSTORIES
      Peace ✌and Love ❤

      Liked by 1 person

    1. Thank you! I appreciate your thoughtful response.
      Your beautiful comment and agreement to this post on my blog just made my evening.
      I found delight love in what you just said on my  post.

      Here is a question for my fellow bloggers and readers:

      Have you felt and connected this poem to any religious crisis in our society.

      Please let me know all your reactions, views and insights in the comment box below!

      I will love to see you thoughtful reply and answer on the question put before you.

      #PATRICKSTORIES
      Peace ✌and Love ❤

      Like

    2. Thank you! I appreciate your thoughtful comment on my blog. Am happy you have to comment on it.

      I pray you have enough time to do it. Thanks.

      Check and review very well.

      Such an awesome way of commenting on me. Thanks. Again

      Thank you! I appreciate your thoughtful response.

      Such an awesome way of replying someone. Thanks. Again

      You are welcome

      #PATRICKSTORIES
      Peace ✌and Love ❤

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  14. This is such an amazing poem Patrick. It paints a true picture of most love situations happening in our society today. And despite the barriers that oppose this beautiful feeling called love, they are never able to quench it.
    Thanks for sharing such a masterpiece
    Always inspiring Patrick! !!🙌❤😊🌸

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    1. Hi

      Thank you. I am happy to see your comment and contribution on this post. It gives me a thoughtful thinking and am  happy for that.

      That is always my intention to see a post that gives me thoughtful thinking about how we view some religious rules in the society we live in.

      After all the struggle, still the love still remain. Am happy you even relate it well as I quote from your comment:

      “””” And despite the barriers that oppose this beautiful feeling called love, they are never able to quench it. “”””

      Am happy you shared your views and contribution right now.

      Good one

      Well, If I wish to be happy is inevitable to keep the vibes flowing.

      Cheers,

      PATRICK

      #PATRICKSTORIES
      Peace ✌and Love ❤

      Liked by 1 person

    1. Thank you! I appreciate your thoughtful response.
      Your beautiful comment and agreement to this post on my blog just made my evening.
      I found delight love in what you just said on my  post.

      Here is a question for my fellow bloggers and readers:

      Have you felt and connected this poem to any religious crisis in our society.

      Please let me know all your reactions, views and insights in the comment box below!

      I will love to see you thoughtful reply and answer on the question put before you.

      #PATRICKSTORIES
      Peace ✌and Love ❤

      Liked by 1 person

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